the chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.

the chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK,

divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.
The bar chart illustrates the
amount
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of
minutes
(in
billions
) of telephone calls in the UK among three categories: local, national and international-fixed
line
, mobiles from 1995 to 2002.
Overall
, it is obvious that calls made via local, and fixed
line
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lines
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were the most popular type in terms of
overall
usage. The lowest figures on the chart are for mobile calls, but
this
category
also
saw the most increase in
users
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user
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minutes
. In 1998 and 1999, the graph shows local-fixed
line
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lines
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around 90
minutes
(
billions
), and national and international-fixed
line
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lines
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approximately 50
minutes
(
billions
).
On the other hand
, calls made by mobile increased
about
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5
minutes
(
billions
). In 1995 and 2002, the chart
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local-fixed
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that the local
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line
was not changed
nearly
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70,
while
national
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the national
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and international-fixed
line
was about 35
then
became around 60
minutes
(
billions
).
In addition
, mobiles were around 5 and
then
became almost 45minutes (
billions
).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, billions, line with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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