The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and B in 1960 and 2010.

The pie graph compares the number of employees in different fields namely manufacturing, sales and services of towns A and B between 1960 and 2010.

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, in town A, the career prospects related to manufacturing became more popular in 2010 than those in other sectors. Meanwhile,

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of the growth of construction and services fields, sales made up the majority of all jobs over the period of years. In town A, 41% of individuals tended to work as sellers in 1960;

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, the figure for

this

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dropped by half in 2010.

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of that, the majority of them moved to manufacturing jobs, accounting for 64%.

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, there was a 20% decrease in the service portion in the same period of time.

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town B, the opposite trend can be seen when looking at the highest percentage of sale-related jobs in 2010, at 53%, despite the fact that

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figure experienced a 17% decline.

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, 10% of candidates chose manufacturing in 1996 rose to 25% in 2010,as well and services saw a minor rise, of 2% during 14 years.

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