Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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According to

a recent survey of university students, whether learning about other subjects

besides

their main subjects or not, has become a serious point of contention. ,

however

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there are a few people who,believe it is a waste of time. I personally acknowledge the first group and

this

essay will discuss both sides of

this

argument. To commence ,each group may have their own qualification ,

hence

,there will be many reasons for

this

phenomenon. On the one side,some people choose to be more active than ordinary people

such

as professional

athlete

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athletes

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,students because they are preparing for championships,they have to be present in

gym

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the gym

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, school , functional practices and etc.. . As a ,result it is logical to participate in other courses

in addition

to the main one. On the other side , there are some passive pupils who only prefer to follow their own

qualification

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qualifications

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. As an example ,

this

year my classmates were too lazy to participate in various classes and they only made fun of active ones.

this

may happen

due to

a lack of energy or an unhealthy lifestyle which leads youngsters to be inactive.

To sum up

although

each company may have their own justifications,

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personally prefer the first band because

not

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I not

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only im very active but

also

encourage my friends to be energetic.

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

In recent years many local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers to do their shopping. Is it a positive or negative development?

Write a letter to a book store manager who is living in another city. Ask him/her to make available a book that you are interested in. In your letter, you should tell: – What book you are looking for? – Why you need this book? – How you plan to purchase the book?

Some people think that it’s a good to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and weekends. Other people think it’s important to keep working life completely separate from social life. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Robots and artificial intelligence are being developed to replace humans in the work place. Why is this happening? Do you think this will have a negative or positive impact on society?

Nowadays, when popular consumer products sell well, it is not because of societal requirements but because of advertising's influence. To what extend do you agree or disagree ?