The char below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
The bar chart illustrates how much money did the countries earn
form
five different types of Correct your spelling
from
product
during 2015-2016. Fix the agreement mistake
products
While the
table shows how the percentage Correct word choice
The
change
in each type in 2016 compared with 2015. Overall
, the value of the
petroleum Correct article usage
apply
products
earned the most in both 2015 and 2016, while
the textiles
had the least value. However
, the percentage change
in values
of textiles
showed the biggest the the change
of
agricultural was the smallest.
The export earned from Change preposition
in
the
petroleum was the most in 2015 which Correct article usage
apply
sit
Correct subject-verb agreement
sits
up
at more than 60%.
And the engineered goods earned Change preposition
apply
also
more than 60% but lower than the previous. The gems and jewelry
made their Change the spelling
jewellery
values
were
not as much as the previous two Unnecessary verb
apply
products
(41%). However
, it was bigger than the remain
type of Replace the word
remaining
products
about two folds. The agricultural products
and the textiles
almost had the same values
appropriate
31% or 32%.
The table shows that only the percentage Change the word
appropriately
change
in values
of gems and jewelry
decreased between 2015 and 2016 Change the spelling
jewellery
while
others also
rose in their proportion. The petroleum products
and the gems and jewelry
Change the spelling
jewellery
products
changed their
Change to a genitive case
the proportion of their values
their values' proportion
values
proportion around 5%, 3% and 5.18% respectively. The engineered goods climbed their values
about 8.5% where
the Correct word choice
whereas
textiles
increased at the top of 15.24%, which was about two folds
from luxuries. Correct your spelling
twofolds
However
, the values
of agricultural products
only raised
0.81%.Verb problem
rose by
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, however, while".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words change, products, textiles, values with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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