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The table and charts below give information on the poilce budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was disctributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the poilce budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was disctributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided information expresses the data
of
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on
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police
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the police
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 budget in the area of Britain in the years 2017 and 2018,
along with
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 the sources, and utilization of the
fund
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.
Overall
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, in two years what are the percentages national government, local taxes and
others
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other
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 sources contributed to the police budget, and how these funds are allocated
into
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to
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 different areas are explained. In
the
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apply
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2018 total
fund
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 was higher than
2017
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in 2017
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. In the year 2017,
national
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the national
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governement contrubuted
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government contributed
 175.5% and in 2018
this
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fund
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 increased by 3.3%. Local taxes
was
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were
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also
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imporved
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improved
 by 10.1%.
Last
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 but not least other sources like grants remained constant.
On the other hand
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,
distribution
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the distribution
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 of the
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fund
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funds
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 in the salary area was decreased. In 2017 it was 75%.
However
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, in 2018 allocated
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fund
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funds
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 declined by 6%. In 2018,
technology
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the technology
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fund
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 elevated by 6%.
Whereas
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, there is no change in
fund
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 distribution in the building and transport.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fund with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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