The chart below shoes the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shoes the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the households owning and renting accommodation in England and Wales
percentagewise
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percentage-wise
between 1918 and 2011.
Overall
, There was a steep but gradual decline in the number of individuals who
rents
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rent
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a house and it has witnessed a downward trend over the
period
of time.
while
,
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the number of households who owns a house has showcased a dramatic rise
throught
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through
throughout
the time and mostly has experienced an upward trend. At the beginning of the
period
, household owners were just over 20
percent
where
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as
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whereas
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household rentals were well over 80
percent
. After witnessing a continuous surge until 1971, In the year
1971
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both
has
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reached
at
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the same
levels
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level
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to
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of
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approximately 50
percent
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per cent
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then
grew around 20
percent
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per cent
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and it has reached nearly 70
percent
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per cent
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before
receeding
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receding
proceeding
to just under 65
percent
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per cent
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at the end
of the
period
. In the year 1918, the percentage of
household
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households
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on
rental
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a rental
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basis were well under 80
percent
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per cent
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but after experiencing declining remarkably
untill
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until
1971. In the year 1971, Both met at around 50 percentage levels
then
from 1971 to 2011
has
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fell more or less 20
percent
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per cent
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and reaching just over 20
percent
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before witnessing a minimal surge of about 5
percent
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per cent
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and reaching considerably over
than
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35
percentage
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at the end
of the
period
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words period, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "surge" was used 2 times.
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