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Due to globalization, many countries lose their traditions and national values. Some people think it is the responsibility of governments to protect these values. Do you agree or disagree?

#globalization #countries #traditions #values #people #responsibility #governments
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 'globalization' defines as the growth of a
country
. Some people believe that
due to
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the inclined rate of trade or capital change in two nations has vastly
effected
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affected
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 the traditional
value
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values
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 of one
country
,
that's
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and that's
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 why individuals think that it is up to the government to inherit cultural values.
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 views.
To begin
 with, every
country
try
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tries
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 their best to take one step ahead in terms of economy and technology from other countries. All the countries are linked with each other with some business or trade,
for
example
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 import and export of goods.
Human kind
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Humankind
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 is
a
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an
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 adaptive nature. By visiting
another countries
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another country
other countries
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 or
by
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watching their dramas or movies, people start copying their characters, to exemplify, clothes, food, living
style
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lifestyle
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.
However
, people should understand the fact that every
country
 has their own cultural values, which are very important to remember, so that,
the
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future generations don't forget about their ancestors and their tradition.
Government
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The government
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 should open more museums to show youngsters their
tradition
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traditions
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. In schools and in colleges cultural plays should be organized
instead
 of
western
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Western
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 party activities.
To sum up
all
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,
government
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the government
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 should organize some cultural activities to keep their tradition intact, so that, other nations recognize us
from
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for
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 our
culture
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cultural
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 values.
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