The bar chart below shows the percentage od Australian men an women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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volume
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the volume
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males
female
in different Fix the agreement mistake
females
age
genres who always did exercise
in the year 2010.
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an exercise
the exercise
Overall
, percentage
of male, and female exercisers were downward. Correct article usage
the percentage
However
, the declined ratio between men, and women female ratio was the
higher.
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habit
of exercise got less priority in Add an article
the habit
a habit
elderly
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the elderly
age
men’s group
. In the age
of 15 to 24 most men were into physical activity. The percentage was 52.8. After that, the old
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older
less down
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middle Correct article usage
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age
maximum male lost their interest from
physical activity, the ratio was only 39.5 in the Change preposition
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age
group
of 35 to 44. However
, this
practice got back among 65
and over Correct article usage
the 65
age
male group
.
In contrast
, in the women age
group
there was not any Add a comma
,group
massively
fluctuation in the interest of physical activation. Change the adverb
massive
Whereas
, in some age
group
women were more Fix the agreement mistake
groups
enthusiastics
than men. In Correct your spelling
enthusiastic
age
between 35-44 (female; 52.5%), 45-54 (female; 53.3%), and 55-64 (female; 53%), these groups are much higher than men’s
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the men’s
group
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last
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the last
group
age
both Add a comma
,age
male
and female Correct article usage
the male
ration
went down. Even though the Correct your spelling
ratio
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differences Correct your spelling
ratio
was
not that much.Change the verb form
were
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