The chart shows the percentage of boys and girls who played various sports in a country in 2010.

The chart shows the percentage of boys and girls who played various sports in a country in 2010.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart shows the percentage of boys and girls who played various sports in a country in 2010.
The bar chart gave information about the percentage of
boys
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and
girls
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in one country who played various
sports
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in 2010. In
generall
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general
,
boys
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there were four out of six
sports
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participated than
girls
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while
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girls
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there were two out of six
sports
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.
Boys
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participated
four
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in four
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sports
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more than
girls
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(Football, Tennis, Basketball and
Criket
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cricket
). In football,
boys
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participated at 20% almost
reach
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a peak and
girls
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participated at under 5%. In tennis,
boys
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participated more than
girls
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by 1%,
boys
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participated at 8%
while
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girls
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participated at 7%. In basketball,
boys
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also
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more than
girls
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by 1%,
boys
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participated at 7% and
girls
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participated
6
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%. But for
criket
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cricket
,
boys
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and
girls
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there were big
different
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differences
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.
Boys
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participated more than 10% but
girls
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only participated under 5%.
However
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,
girls
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participated in swimming and netball more than
boys
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. In swimming,
girls
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more than
boys
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by 5,5%.
Girls
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participated at 16% but
boys
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paricipated
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participated
at 10.5%. In
criket
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cricket
,
girls
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participated at more than 15%
while
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boys
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only participated at 2%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words boys, girls, sports with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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