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Female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014

The bar chart shows the unemployment rates among
women
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 in the countries that make up the United Kingdom, both in 2013 and
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2014. There has generally been a small decrease in female unemployment rates from 2013 to 2014, except in Scotland. In 2013, 5.6% of
women
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 in Northern Ireland were unemployed. The only country with a smaller
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 of
women
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 unemployed was Wales, with a rate of 5.4%. Both countries saw a decrease in the
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 of unemployed
women
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 in 2014. In Northern Ireland, the
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 fell to 4.6% and in Wales it fell to 5%. England had the greatest
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 of unemployed
women
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 in 2013, with 6.8%.
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 decreased by 0.3% in 2014.
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, Scotland was the only country which had an increasing
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 of unemployed
women
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. In 2013, it had 6.1% of
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 out of work.
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 increased to 6.7% in 2014, making it the country with the highest female unemployment rate of the four countries.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unemployment rates
  • female unemployment
  • data representation
  • overall trend
  • disparities
  • regional differences
  • insight
  • analysis
  • significant changes
  • employment policies
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