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The bar chart bar gives information about shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan.

The bar chart bar gives information about shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan.
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The diagram illustrates the shares of expenditures across five domains in the US, Canada, the UK and Japan in 2009.
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, the histogram demonstrates the three categories which have the highest charge out of the five over the 2009 period,
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 in, contrast the rest two fields remained the lowest expenditure. Observing the details, it is remarkable that The US has spent most of its payments on housing
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 transportation, food, fitness care and clothing which cost the lowest. Noticeably, housing has the most payment of every country except Japan which has the highest cost of Food followed by housing, transportation and health concerns
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 clothing. Canada costs are very similar to the US but slightly different in expenditure of clothing than fitness concern. Coming next is the UK, which costs housing the most
then
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 food, transportation, clothing and health care respectively.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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