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Some employers want their employees to be contactable for work purposes at all times. Does this attitude have more advantages than disadvantages?

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It is certainly true that almost all managers require their staff to keep in
contact
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 for
work
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 at all times.
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 accepting that, I believe
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 strict regulation is more likely to have a harmful impact. On the one hand, there are several benefits of employees keeping in
contact
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 with
work
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 at any
time
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. A common advantage is that the staff can update new information about the
company
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 about their jobs, and solve the problems of the manager anytime they need. Another positive aspect is that every person has a position and expertise;
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, keeping
contact
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 helps to support their colleagues quickly and correctly. Nam is my friend and he is a technician, he always supports his colleagues after leaving the workspace anytime they need to check the error in the system computers of their
company
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.
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, I am of the opinion that the aforementioned advantages are at the expense of greater drawbacks. One obvious disadvantage is that
contact
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 at
work
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 all the
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 leads to a significant effect mentality and health of employees.
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, they cannot
work
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 effectively on the next day and
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 leads to dwindling performance for the
company
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. Another negative effect is that the quality of life of staff can be decreased because they don't have the
time
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 for their family.
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, after 8 hours in the workspace, my brother must check the message of his
company
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 anytime his manager needs,
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 my brother can not talk with my family in the evening. In conclusion,
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 keeping
contact
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 at
work
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 all the
time
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 has some benefits, it is obvious that
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 attitude is more harmful than possible benefits because it significantly affects employees
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 as mental, health and quality of life.
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