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the plans below show the layout of a universitiy's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

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The two maps demonstrate the university
sports
 centre in its current form and its proposed enhancement.
Overall
, the plan is to expand the centre’s main building into outdoor courts and remove all outdoor areas of the centre. Currently, the centre has one changing room, gym, 25-meter
pool
 and
reception
 facilities. To the east and west sides of the
,
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building there are outdoor courts.
According to
 the proposal, the 25m
pool
, changing room,
reception
 and seating area will remain the same as the original site. The first development will be the gym’s expansion through the easterly
side
 and acquiring its own entrance. To the south
side
 of the gym and east
side
 of the seating ,area the
sports
 hall will be added and both of the
sports
 hall’s and gym’s east
side
 two new dance studios will constructed. To the west
side
 of the changing room second
pool
 will constructed under the name of the leisure
pool
.
Additionally
, two new changing rooms, a
sports
 shop and
the
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 cafe will be added to the
reception
 zone. One of the changing rooms and cafe will placed on the east
side
 and the other changing rooms that will be specially constructed for the leisure
pool
 and
sports
 shop will be placed on the west
side
 of the
reception
.
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