Your work in a busy but poorly organised office and you are keen to be promoted. Your employer need to find a new supervisor for your department Write a letter to your employer . In the letter Ask to be considered for this job Explain why you would be a suitable candidate Outline the current problems and the changes you would like to make

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Dear Mr.

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Smith

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smith

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Iam

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I am

writing to let you know my interest in the promotion which has been announced earlier by our department for supervisor post.

And since

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spended

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10 years in the department as

manager

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assisstance

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assistant

also

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manage

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to be in lead in your absence vaccations which gave me the strength

leadership

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I would like to be considered for the new position.

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I ended my higher diploma in the project I

concentrate

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on the solutions

which

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found to be

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apply

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suitable for our

company

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company's

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benefits,

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it would motivate our company to better pathway for better

with

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outcomes. So I

considered

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my self

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a suitable candidate for our

deparment

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department

town

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branch. As I mentioned my target

specificaly

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specifically

aiming

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to organize some issues which our company stuggle with

such

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as technical

operation

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, HR team recruitment and

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to maintain

better

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timeline workflow for our

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which I revealed recently in meetings committee. Look forward

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your approval. Best wishes Yours faithfully Ali

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
27
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

167 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

keen to be promoted
suitable candidate
supervisor role
relevant experience
organizational abilities
problem-solving skills
familiarity with current problems
impact on productivity
streamlining processes
improving communication channels
introducing new tools and technologies

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