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Air traffic is increasingly leading to more noise pollution and airport construction. One reason for this is the growth in low-cost passenger flight, often to hold holiday destination. Some people say that government should try to reduce air traffic by taxing it more heavily. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays flying many aeroplanes is negatively impacting the environment through noise pollution. Nations are constructing more airports. Proponents suggest taxes on flight
fares
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 should be made pricey as a means of solving the above problem. I do not agree with
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To begin
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 with, holidays are an essential part of our lives. Travelling for long hours can negatively impact one's life. Scientists have attested to the development of clots in human legs with long hours of journeying. Meanwhile, most
people
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 like to spend their holidays in other nations or even far away places to enjoy beautiful weather and sceneries. To make a quick travel, air crafts are convenient. I can understand why some of the
fares
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 are way cheaper. Flying a plane covers the same distances over shorter periods compared with travelling by land or sea. It
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 saves time. Most modern items are already expensive. I
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 do not agree that flight
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 should be highly taxed to deter
people
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 from travelling. It is an infringement on their rights.
On the other hand
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, proponents of heavily taxing plane
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 are making suggestions that will in the long run reduce noise pollution by flying aircraft and the need to construct more airports. The aeroplane manufacturers should find a way to make flying planes that make very little or no noise.
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 will save us all the bother.
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, the use of more helicopters could be adopted and their use does not necessarily require expanding or building additional airports.
To sum up
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, I can understand that reduced flight
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 increased the rate of travel with consequent environmental problems. In spite of
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, I do not think it is fair to put in measures that will make it difficult for
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 to enjoy their holidays.
People
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 are working hard and should live a free and fair life.

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Introduction & Conclusion Clarity
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Thesis Clarity
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Topic Relevance
Your essay introduced relevant issues related to air travel and environmental concerns, effectively setting the context.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • noise pollution
  • airport construction
  • low-cost passenger flight
  • holiday destination
  • taxing
  • revenue
  • sustainable transportation
  • mitigation measures
  • unaffordable
  • tourism revenue
  • innovation
  • quieter
  • environmentally friendly
  • government intervention
  • public opposition
  • freedom and convenience
  • travel
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • environmental degradation
  • airport expansions
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