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The charts show projections for global production by sector in 2040 and 2060. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The charts show projections for global production by sector in 2040 and 2060. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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the pie chart
descises
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describes
decides
despises
 the percentage of
world
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, expected production by
services
, energy, manufacturing,
agriculture
,
materials
 and information technology between 2040 and 2060 As the chart shows, it is predicted that the percentage of
services
 and manufacturing will be higher than others.
Services
, manufacturing,
materials
 and information technology will grow
up
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while
 energy and
agriculture
 will decrease. from the graph,
it is clear that
,
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world
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the world
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, projected production by
services
 will a slow increase from 40% to 41% between 2040 and 2060. the proportion of
services
 is
highest
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the highest
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 it is predicted that manufacturing
slight
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 increase from 31% to 33% over a
period
20
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 years. regarding the figures from
materials
, it is likely that
world
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, expected output by
materials
 will a slow
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increase
increse
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increase
 from 3% to 4% during
a
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the
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period
 2040-2060 it is forecast that
,
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apply
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 the proportion of
enery
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energy
 will
a
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apply
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significant
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significantly
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 go down during
a
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the
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period
 between 2014 and 2060 from 7% to 5%. about
agriculture
, it is projected that
agricuture
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agriculture
 will
a
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quick
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 fall from 4% to 1% between 2040 and 2060. the percentage of
agriculture
 is
lowest
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the lowest
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 info-com tech is estimated to
slight
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slightly
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 rise from 15% to 16% during
a
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the
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period
 2040-2060.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words services, agriculture, materials, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slow" was used 2 times.
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