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The pie charts below show the comparision of different kinds of energy production in France in two years.

The pie charts below show the comparision of different kinds of energy production in France in two years.
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The two pie charts illustrate the difference in
energy
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 source distribution in France in 1995 and 2005.
Overall
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it is clear that
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energy
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 production changed significantly for
petrol
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 and nuclear
sources
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 between these two years. In 1995 there were three main
sources
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 of electricity production namely coal, gas and
petrol
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, which were responsible for just shy over 90% of all amount of the produced
energy
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.
Therefore
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, only 11.3% of the total amount of
energy
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 was sourced from nuclear and other
sources
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. 
On the other hand
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,
although
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 coal, gas and
petrol
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 remained the main
sources
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 of
energy
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 in 2005, their contribution to
energy
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 production reduced to approximately 80%,
while
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 nuclear and other
sources
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 produced two times more in comparison with 1995.
This
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 difference was achieved by reducing the usage of
petrol
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 by 10%.
According to
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 the data, the portion of electricity produced from coal and gas in 2005 increased between half and one per cent compared to 1995.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, petrol, sources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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