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he chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting a reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

he chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting a reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar diagram depicts the sum figure of
minutes
 of
Australia
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Australian
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 telephone calls in three different kinds namely local, national & international, and mobiles during a period of seven years between 1995 and 2002.
Overall
, as clearly seen
that
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the record of mobiles and domestic & international witnessed an upward tendency
while
 the data of local fluctuated moderately.
Besides
 that, it is obvious that the record of regional accounted for
bigger
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a bigger
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 share than the others during the same period. In terms of domestic &
global
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and global
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 and digital telephone calls, it is evident that the data of these two categories climbed gradually by 12 and 10 billion
minutes
 between 2001 and 2005.
Nevertheless
,
the
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mobile calls increased rapidly starting from 12 units to approximately 46 units in four years from 2005
while
 the internal & worldwide remained
slight
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 rise and hit
the
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a
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 peak at 61 billion
minutes
 in 2008. With regard to the record of provincial calls, it is illustrated by the graph that
this
 data experienced an upward trend and reached the top at 90 units in 2005.
However
, the local slumped steadily to 72 billion
minutes
 in the next four years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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