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Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 the issue of child
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 in leisure
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 has become a matter of considerable debate. There are those who opine that
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parents
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 should motivate their
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 to attend
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activities
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 in their free
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. Others believe that
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parents
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 should leave their
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 to occupy themselves independently. In
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 I will examine both views and advocate my personal opinion
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. The
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 of people who are in favour of
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's participation in
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activities
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 might argue that
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 it will enhance their leadership
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children
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 who participate in teamwork can collaborate easily with their colleagues later in their
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,
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 can spend quality
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 with
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 mates
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activities
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, allowing them to socialize with
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 from different socio-economic backgrounds.
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, opponents of
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 notion believe that
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parents
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 should allow freedom to their
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 when deciding about their leisure
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activities
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. If
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 allow flexibility
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 choosing free
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activities
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 for their
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, they would improve their self-dependency and confidence. A recent research conducted by a Dhaka University professor shows that
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children
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 who enjoy more freedom in their leisure
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 tend to be more confident and self-dependent in their future life. In the end, I acknowledge that the freedom for
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 is invaluable for their personal development.
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 should definitely encourage their
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 to be involved in
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activities
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 as it would allow them to build their social and leadership skills,
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 are of Paramount importance for their future
career
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • occupied
  • organized
  • group activities
  • benefits
  • social
  • teamwork skills
  • interpersonal skills
  • friendship
  • discipline
  • time management
  • interests
  • hobbies
  • independent play
  • creativity
  • problem-solving skills
  • self-reliance
  • explore
  • discover
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