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The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar charts illustrate the information of how many males and females do housework activities as a percentage and how long each gender engages in various works, cooking, cleaning, pet care and house repair.
Overall
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, a higher percentage of women do cooking and cleaning than male, it is the opposite for house repair. The time duration spent for each activity for each gender
also
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show
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similar
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 pattern. When looking at the details,
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 just above 80% of women cook meals and spend more than 80 minutes interestingly. Followed by cleaning stood at around 60%, which,
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 minutes of time they spent completing
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 task.
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, there are no significant changes in pet care. These figures stood at nearly 20% and 20 minutes spent, respectively.
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, in ,contrast the least amount of people do hose repairs daily, which
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account for just below 20%
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 number is half for women.
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