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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The given maps illustrate the layout of
Islip
town
center
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 in the present day
,
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 and its plan for
the
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apply
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development.
Overall
, it can be seen that
currently
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Islip
town
center
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 only has a few public facilities.
However
, in the planned development map, there will be several new amenities and
the
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a
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 pedestrian area. Recently,
Islip
town
center
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centre
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 has
one-line
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a one-line
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 main
road
 from the west to the east.
Then
, there are
shops
 in the north and the south of the Main
road
.
Moreover
, behind the
shops
, a housing area has been placed. From the main
road
, there are two branch streets. One of the branches is located
in
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 the left side of
Shops
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the Shops
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, and there is a school
in
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 the end of the street.
In addition
, the other branch is
in
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on
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 the east side of
Shops
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the Shops
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, and it is ended by the Park.
Furthermore
, in the plans for
Islip
town
center
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centre
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 development, the main
road
 will be removed.
However
, there will be
a
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new
road
 access called
dual
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a dual
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 carriageway that will surround the
center
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centre
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 and
does
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not have
the
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an
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 ending.
Moreover
, in the
future
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 only one Shop will remain, and the other Shop will be removed.
Then
, the
removed
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shops
 will be replaced by several new facilities
such
 as
Bus
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a Bus
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 Station, Shopping
Center
, and Car Park. The school is still in the same place as today, yet the park will be renovated to be smaller.
In addition
, new housing will be constructed in the south and north
area
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areas
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, in addition, moreover".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words islip, town, center, road, shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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