The pie cahrt below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie cahrt below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Given is a pie chart showing why agricultural
land
becomes less productive over time
along with
a table which shows how these causes affected the
three
regions of North
America
,
Europe
, and Oceania during the 1990s. Looking at the pie chart we can decipher that there are
three
main causes of worldwide
land
degradation
, overgrazing
from
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animals
such
as cows,
over cultivation
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over-cultivation
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from
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crops, and
deforestation
. The most impactful cause is
the
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overgrazing which accounts for 35% of the degraded
land
.
Next,
is
the
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deforestation
which is not far from overgrazing at 30% and
lastly
is
the
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over
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cultivation. All
three
of these add up to 93%. There is
then
another small segment which is
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‘other’ which accounts for
the
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7% of all other smaller causes of the
degradation
. Moving on to the table which is essentially a more detailed breakdown of the pie chart as it divides these groups into 3 regions, North
America
,
Europe
, and Oceania in the 1990s we can see that
Europe
had the highest percentage of total
land
degradation
at 23%.
This
can be
further
broken down to 9.8% from
deforestation
, 7.7% from
over cultivation
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, and 5.5% from
over grazing
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overgrazing
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of animals. Looking at Oceania next which is not a single landmass but rather a large group of islands in the south pacific including New
Zeland
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Zealand
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and Australia the total is shown to be 13% of degraded
land
. They have the highest percentage of
over grazing
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compared to the other two groups at 11.3% and the rest of their
degradation
comes from
deforestation
at 1.7%.
Lastly
, moving on to North
America
, their total is only 5% with 0.2% of it coming from
deforestation
, 3.3% from overcultivation and 1.5% from overgrazing.
Overall
, we can see that
Europe
is the continent which
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affected the most
from
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land
degradation
in the 1990s as they have the highest percentage of degraded
land
at 23% as mentioned above
whereas
North
America
is the
least
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at 5%. All
three
of the percentages add up to
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41% meaning that there is still 59% of worldwide
degradation
to be accounted for.
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