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The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates how many passengers use the London Underground Station in different hours of a typical day.
Overall
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, the peak time of using the Underground is 8:00 a.m. and 6:00 pm.
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 with, it is the highest
number
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 that
people
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 who use station in the early morning(at 8:00 am) around 400
people
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.It is the time when
people
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 go to work, university, school.
This
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number
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 drops rapidly to less than 200 at around 10 a.m., which is half of the peak hour. Metro usage gradually increases after 11:00, but there is a sharp decline after 2:00 until 4:00. Meanwhile, the
number
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 of
people
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 using the metro at 16:00 is around 100
people
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.
After
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this
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 rapid decline, there was a severe increase and the
number
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 userers reached its peak at 18:00. The
last
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 drop in subway usage occurs 18:00pm. The
number
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 of
people
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 using the metro in the
last
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 hours is approximately 150
people
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drops" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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