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Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter •Suggest how you could help her in her home •Say why you would like to do this work •Explain when you will and will not be available Write at least 150 words. You do not need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Mrs Barrett,

#mrs #barrett #woman #lives #town #someone #home #hours #summer #•suggest #•say #work #•explain #addresses
Dear Mrs Barrett, I am
writhing
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this
 letter in response to your advertisement in
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the tribune
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tribune
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Tribune
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 on 29
septemeber
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September
Septemeber
 2021 for
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an assitant
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assitant
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assistant
for
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with
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 household
chore
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in
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next summer of
year
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the year
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 2022. I have one and half years experience in
houework
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housework
homework
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chore
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. I was working as
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an assitant
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assitant
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assistant
 for Mrs
smith
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 in her home. I was responsible for cooking and cleaning
of
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the house. I can help you
also
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daily
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a daily
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 basis
for
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house
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housework
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work
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few
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a few
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 hours
for
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or
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 any kind of
work
. I am very much
intrested
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interested
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work
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working
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 as
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an assitant
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assitant
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assistant
 to gain practical experience
of
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work related
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work-related
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responsiblities
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responsibilities
. It is part of my school assignment where
i
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I
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 need to
work
 in my summer holidays to get some
work
 experience. I will be available to
work
 from
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 to
saturday
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Saturday
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 from 10 am to 3 pm.
Also
 if any family urgency occurs in my family I will not be able to
work
 on that day. I Look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Sarah beth
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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