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Some people think that employers should ensure a pleasant working environment so that workers feel valued and will therefore work hard. Others feel that employers should be stricter with employees and monitor them closely to ensure they work hard. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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One of the social concerns today relates to
employer's
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environment
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.
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 it is commonly suggested that
employers
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 should ensure a pleasant working
environment
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 so that workers feel valued and will
therefore
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work
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 hard, others feel that
employers
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 should be stricter with
employees
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 and monitor them closely to ensure they
work
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 hard. In my opinion, to ensure that
employers
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 can
work
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 hard, we need to have both of the above factors. On the one hand, it is argued that
employers
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 should have a good working
environment
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. The main reason is that good facilities, reasonable rules and friendly colleagues will help
employers
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 have a comfortable spirit and more motivation to go to
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. It is
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 possible to say that a pleasant
environment
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 plays a very important role in each person's
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.
For instance
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, if your
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 are facilities bad, your workplace has strict rules or you have some bad colleagues, you will have no interest in going to
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 and that will affect your
work
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 performance. Another reason is working efficiency, when you
work
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 in a good
environment
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, you will easily do your
work
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 more effectively.
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, working in a pleasant
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make
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employers
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will
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feel more comfortable and valued too!
On the other hand
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, it is strongly believed by others that
employers
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 should be stricter and monitor
employees
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 closely. People often have
this
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 opinion because they think if they relax their strictness,
employees
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 will neglect their
work
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. A second point is that
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 productivity will be reduced if they don't monitor
employees
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 closely. A particularly good example is tighter management of
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 will create a disciplined
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, from which each employee will have more structure in their
work
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. In conclusion, the issue of working
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 and employee management is always a topic that causes many disputes. Personally, I tend to believe that
employers
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 and
employees
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 should ensure a good working
environment
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 accompanied by strict management by
employers
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 because both of the above factors are important and necessary.
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