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in Australia in 1999. Overall
, women
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in two
qualifications
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men
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in three. The highest figures
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difference
between the percentage
of females
and males
in
different post-school Change preposition
with
qualifications
in Australia in 1999. Overall
, women
had the highest share
in two
qualifications
, while
men
ranked first
in three. The highest figures
for women
and men
were reported in undergraduate diploma
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difference
between the proportions of males
and females
in skilled vocational diploma
, with the former standing first
with 90%. The disparity between the two
figures
was almost the same for undergraduate diplomas
and postgraduate diploma
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in the former women
had the highest share
with 70%, men
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diplomas
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, respectively. There was a significant Fix the agreement mistake
diplomas
difference
between the proportions of males
and females
in skilled vocational diploma
, with the former standing first
with 90%. The disparity between the two
figures
was almost the same for undergraduate diplomas
and postgraduate diplomas
. However
, while
in the former women
had the highest share
with 70%, men
accounted for the largest percentage
in the latter with 70%.Submitted by mawka974 on
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