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The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.

The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.
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The bar chart shows the difference between the percentage of females and males with different post-school qualifications in Australia in 1999.
Overall
,
women
 had the highest share in two qualifications,
while
men
 ranked first in three. The highest figures for
women
 and
men
 were reported in undergraduate
diplomas
 and skilled vocational
diplomas
, respectively. There was a significant difference between the proportions of males and females in skilled vocational diploma, with the former standing first with 90%. The disparity between the two figures was almost the same for undergraduate
diplomas
 and postgraduate
diplomas
.
However
,
while
 in the former
women
 had the highest share with 70%,
men
 accounted for the largest percentage in the latter with 70%. The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of
men
 and
women
 who held them in 1999.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words women, men, diplomas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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