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The charts show projections for global production by sector in 2040 and 2060 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The charts show projections for global production by sector in 2040 and 2060 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The presented pie charts illustrate the proportion of world , projected production by sector over a period
20
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 years from 2040 to 2060 . As can be clearly seen from the graph the number of info -
comtech
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com tech
,
services
 and manufacturing .will be
considenrably
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considerably
 higher
compare
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 with the figure
of
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for
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agricultural
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agriculture
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,
energy
 and materials .there are will
a
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significant increase in the data for into -
comtech
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com tech
, material ,
services
 and manufacturing ,agriculture and
energy
 experienced an opposite trend . In terms of
agricultural
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the agricultural
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 and
energy
 world , projected production by sector .the prediction shows
is
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that there will be
an
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 decrease slightly in the data for
energy
 from 7% in 2040 to 5% in 2060. It is expected that
the
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agriculture will go down slowly from 4% in 2040 to 4 % in 2060 . Looking at the record for info-comtech , materials ,
services
 and manufacturing .It is anticipated that the data for info-comtech will
under
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go from 15% in 2040 to 16% in 2060 .The number of materials
estimated
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 to increase from 3%
tin
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in
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 2040 to 4% in 2060. The forecast reveals
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that the figure for
services
 will witness
jump
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a jump
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 from 40% in 2040
o
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 41 % in 2060 .The record manufacturing is forecast to
recket
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rocket
 from 31 % in 2040 to 33%
to
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 2060
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Vocabulary: Replace the words services, energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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