The bar chart below illustrates five different industries' percentage share of Brazil's economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below illustrates five different industries' percentage share of Brazil's economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart elaborates
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proportion of 5 various industries in the economy of Brazil as percentages in 2009,
2019
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and 2019
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and provides future predictions for 2029.
Overall
, finance, tourism and energy
industry
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industries
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play
main
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role
while
food processing and manufacturing have less share in the
overall
economy. To give more detail,
finance
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the finance
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industry had
most
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impact on
economy
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the economy
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with 30
percent
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and it increases gradually with
expactations
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expectations
of 40
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in 2029.
Tourism
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and fossil fuel sector are more or less stable, both industries stood at 25
percent
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in 2009,
however
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tourism sector is predicted to face
slight
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decrease
to
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of
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20
percent
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.
On the other hand
,
food
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the food
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processing sector was at its highest figure in 2019
with
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20
percent
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but is projected to go down to 10
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in future. Manufacturing follows
quite
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opposite
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pattern of finance as
forecast
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the forecast
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shows it is going to diminish from 20
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of share to 5 in 2029.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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