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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The two bar chart depicts the
innvolvement
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involvement
 of male and female in different
activites
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activities
.
Overall
, it is evident that the first chart represents all the data in
percentage
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percentages
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while
 the latter chart represents all the specifics in
minutes
. In detail, Cooking was the most
prefered
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preferred
 activity constituting
to be
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60 and 80 percent
by
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of
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male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 respectively.And the amount of
time
 spent on the following two was
also
same
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the same
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 in numbers.
Furthermore
,
female
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the female
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 population was more inclined to
cleaning
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clean
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 which was
of
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apply
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60
percent
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per cent
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whereas
male
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the male
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 was only 40.
Also
,
time
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the time
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 spent on cleaning by
male
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males
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 was just over 40
minutes
whereas
female
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females
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 spent almost 65
minutes
.
In addition
,
equal
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an equal
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number of
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apply
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share(
time
also
) was spent on pet care by both
the
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gender which was 20.
However
, house repairs
was
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were
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 mostly
prefered
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preferred
 by
male
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the male
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 which was almost 20
percent
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per cent
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whereas
 the female crowd
prefer
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preferred
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 to do only the maintenance work related to house repairs.The
time
spend
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spent
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 on
this
 activity was 20
minutes
 by male.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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