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The table below gives information about a restaurant's average sales in three different branches in 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The table below gives information about a restaurant's average sales in three different branches in 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
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The given table
showed
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shows
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 three different restaurant
branches
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 selling
performa
Correct your spelling
performance
 in 2016. Sales
performa
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are
splitted
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split
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in
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into
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 six different categories :
number
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 of
transactions
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,
transaction
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value
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,
number
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 both of
eat-in
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 and
take away
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take-away
show examples
transactions
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, and most popular item.
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Number
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A number
The number
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 of
transactions
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close-related
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was related
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with
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to
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number
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a number
the number
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 of
eat-in
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 and take-away
transactions
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,
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apply
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 but
had
Verb problem
did
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 not
correlated
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correlate
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 with
transaction
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value
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 and
customers
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customer
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 preference.
To begin
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 with, Georgia
Street
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branches
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 had the highest
number
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 in the
number
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 of
transaction
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 categories with 854
orders
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, followed by
Dunsmuir
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Street
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branches
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 and
Drake
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Street
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branches
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, with
total
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a total
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750
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of 750
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orders
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 and 390
orders
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 respectively. Simultaneously with the previous categories, the
number
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 of
eat-in
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transactions
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were
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was
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 405
orders
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, 358
orders
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, and 200
orders
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 respectively, and the
number
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 of take-away
transactions
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are
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was
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 449
orders
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, 392
orders
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, and 190
orders
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 respectively.
Furthermore
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, an anomaly occurred in
Drake
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branches
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 that the
number
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 of
eat-in
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orders
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 was higher than
take-away
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takeaway
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orders
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.
In addition
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, Georgia
Street
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branches
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 scored the highest
transaction
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value
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 with USD 10.69.
Although
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 the
number
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 of
transactions
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 in
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Drake
Correct article usage
the Drake
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Street
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branches
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 was lower than
Dunsmuir
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Street
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branches
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,
but
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apply
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the
transaction
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value
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 was higher.
Drake
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Street
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branches
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'
transaction
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 was USD 9.02 and for
Dunsmuir
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Street
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 was USD 5.61.  Most
favorite
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favourite
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 foods in Georgia
Street
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branches
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 and
Drake
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Street
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 are not
chicken
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 as a self-condiment dish, which is
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chicken
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a chicken
the chicken
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 burger and
chicken
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 pasta.
In contrast
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,
Dunsmuir
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Street
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branches
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'
most
Correct quantifier usage
apply
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favorite
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favourite
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 meal
are
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is
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chicken
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 wings.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words branches, number, transactions, transaction, value, eat-in, street, orders, dunsmuir, drake, chicken with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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