The pie charts give information about the average household consumption in Japan and Malaysia in five categories.
The relevant pie chart depicts the mean consumption of Japanese and Malaysian houses in 5 sectors.
As an overview, it can be seen that housing in Malaysia possesses the highest rate of all the other categories in both nations, exactly 34%
In regards to Malaysia, it can be observed that food and other goods/services
are having
almost similar figures ( 27% and 26% Wrong verb form
have
respectfully
). Replace the word
respectively
Moreover
, it is apparent the use of transport is 10%, the
half in comparison to Japan. Correct article usage
apply
Last
but not least, health care obtains a minor percentage.
In regards to Japan, it is evident that the highest utilization is the one of goods,services and food and
(29% and 24% ). Correct word choice
apply
Furthermore
, transport and housing were used similarly
. Finally
, heath
care has a minor figure in Japan as well.Correct your spelling
health
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