The pie charts give information about the average household consumption in Japan and Malaysia in five categories.

The relevant pie chart depicts the mean consumption of Japanese and Malaysian houses in 5 sectors. As an overview, it can be seen that housing in Malaysia possesses the highest rate of all the other categories in both nations, exactly 34% In regards to Malaysia, it can be observed that food and other goods/services

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almost similar figures ( 27% and 26%

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, it is apparent the use of transport is 10%,

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half in comparison to Japan.

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but not least, health care obtains a minor percentage. In regards to Japan, it is evident that the highest utilization is the one of goods,services and food

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(29% and 24% ).

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, transport and housing were used

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heath

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health

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care has a minor figure in Japan as well.

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Oct 2, 2023

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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.

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