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As social media continue to develop, more and more youngsters have unsupervised access to all the contents available over the internet in order to meet and chat with friends and even strangers, which can lead to some potentially dangerous situations. What solutions can you suggest to deal with this problem?

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In the modern era, a large number of young
people
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 use the
internet
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 to meet and talk with friends via social
media
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.
Due to
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 social
media
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 and the growth of the
internet
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 in the 21st century, many
children
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 are facing issues related to their health and the expression of their feelings
as a result
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 of the lack of face-to-face interaction.
This
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 issue can be solved by opting for some measures.
To begin
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 with, there are many
people
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 all over the world who use the
internet
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 for their work or education purposes.
As a result
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, everyone uses it until late at night, which can lead to a variety of health issues,
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 as vision problems from constantly staring at computers or mobile phones and spinal curvatures from excessive sitting in front of computers and laptops.
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,
due to
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 the nature of online meetings and conversations, there is a lack of face-to-face interaction among
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due to
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 which youngsters are unable to express their feelings
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 the loss of peer interaction. Parents can help in resolving these issues by blocking the access of
children
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 to websites that are not
children
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-friendly.
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 to that, parents can encourage
children
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 to go out and play
instead
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 of being on the
internet
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 all day in exchange for a surprise or more quality time. Social
media
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 companies can
also
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 contribute to the solution by restricting the access of
children
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 to the platforms on the basis of their age, which can protect them from content
that is
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 not suitable for them.
For example
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, the social
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 platform Facebook recently updated its privacy policies to restrict access to
children
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 under the age of ten. To summarize, young
people
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 use the
internet
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 to interact with various types of
people
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 online without any supervision, which gives them a sense of freedom and confidence in sending unethical messages to others. To stay out of it, parents should monitor their communication and provide suitable guidance and advice to their
children
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.

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