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The bar chart below gives the results of a survey in a major company showing the attitudes of two groups of workers to various factors affecting work performance.

The bar chart below gives the results of a survey in a major company showing the attitudes of two groups of workers to various factors affecting work performance.
The diagram provides information on the outcome of
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research conducted in a firm displaying the behaviour of 2 categories of employees towards a variety of factors with
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 on work yield.
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 it is immediately apparent that numerous activities are likely to positively influence how the youth perform compared to the
middle aged
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 individuals. Interestingly, teamwork and atmosphere at the
work place
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results
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 in the same work output by the young and older employees at 60 and 30 respectively.
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, factors like a competent boss, respect from colleagues , job satisfaction and money
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 increase productivity from the 2 different age groups.
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, there are vast differences in the performance
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 youngsters and the old under conditions
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 for personal development,
relaxed
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a relaxed
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 working environment,
promotion
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and promotion
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 prospects.
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, whilst the recorded production from the youth when given an opportunity to develop themselves is nearly 100, that of the
middle aged
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 people is just
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40.
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, 80 is the production outcome among the youngsters when offered a relaxed working atmosphere and promotion prospects
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 the older individuals yield 30 and 50 in succession of the prior stated factors.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • performance metrics
  • employee satisfaction
  • work-life balance
  • job security
  • recognition and rewards
  • survey results
  • attitude differences
  • workforce demographics
  • management strategies
  • company policies
  • employee engagement
  • professional development
  • compensation packages
  • motivation factors
  • survey respondents
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