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You wish to apply for a new college course, but you are unsure about the details of cost, duration and subjects posted on the college website. Write an email to the relevant person in admissions at the college, asking them to clarify these points for you. In this email, Say what your interest is Explain why the website is unclear Request the information that you need

#college #course #cost #duration #subjects #website #email #person #admissions #points #interest #request #information
Dear Mr. Smith, I am interested in
photography
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course
this
 year and I have seen your name on the college
website
 as the contact for admission queries. I have several questions for you, and I hope you can help.
Firstly
, regarding the cost of the
course
, is the fee of $99 per month or for the whole
course
? Is it possible to pay in monthly instalments, or is the fee paid
for
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 full upfront? The
website
 says that 'the other payment options are available' but there is no explanation.
Secondly
, can you tell me what the exact dates of the
course
 are? Your
website
 says 'Summer to autumn' but I cannot see any dates relating to
this
. I would be grateful for precise dates, including when I need to pay for the
course
 and buy the books and so on.
Finally
, I would appreciate some information about the
course
 content itself, including the details of the equipment to be used and the wording of the certificate I will receive
at the end
. The
website
 says that I should contact you
for
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this
. Thank you for your help, and I look forward to receiving the information requested. Kind Regards, Shakir Ali
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