You wish to apply for a new college course, but you are unsure about the details of cost, duration and subjects posted on the college website. Write an email to the relevant person in admissions at the college, asking them to clarify these points for you. In this email, Say what your interest is Explain why the website is unclear Request the information that you need

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Dear Mr. Smith, I am interested in

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course

this

year and I have seen your name on the college

website

as the contact for admission queries. I have several questions for you, and I hope you can help.

Firstly

, regarding the cost of the

course

, is the fee of $99 per month or for the whole

course

? Is it possible to pay in monthly instalments, or is the fee paid

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full upfront? The

website

says that 'the other payment options are available' but there is no explanation.

Secondly

, can you tell me what the exact dates of the

course

are? Your

website

says 'Summer to autumn' but I cannot see any dates relating to

this

. I would be grateful for precise dates, including when I need to pay for the

course

and buy the books and so on.

Finally

, I would appreciate some information about the

course

content itself, including the details of the equipment to be used and the wording of the certificate I will receive

at the end

. The

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this

. Thank you for your help, and I look forward to receiving the information requested. Kind Regards, Shakir Ali

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2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.5

Complete response

4.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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