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Universities should provide students with the skills they will require in order to succeed at their future jobs. To what extrnt do you agree or disagree with the above opinion? What are the some of the job skills employers look for new employees.

#universities #students #skills #future #jobs #extrnt #job #employers #employees
it is argued that the necessary
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 skills are supposed to be offered to college
students
. from my
persepctive
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perspective
, providing a wide range of required capacities plays an essential role in
future
 life. there are several reasons why
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 view it as necessarities. at first,
due to
 the
after-epidamic
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after-epidemic
 era, the rate of unemployment and living costs, which citizens have to face, are rising sharply during the past five years.
students
 who lack
job
 skills are not capable of overcoming
the
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future
 burdens. next, it is reported that knowledge has been
inputed
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inputted
 in a traditional approach by 90%
universities
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. and the content is
out dated
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, which is not in line with
the
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society. the complaints about the contents and teaching methods from
students
 were increasing.
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students
for
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 example, they acquire knowledge from textbooks and are confused about their
job
 direction. when
students
 graduate, the gap between school and reality has appeared and problems will not
been
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 solved. in conclusion, universities have
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a responsibilities
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responsibilities
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 to incalculate those skills which
students
 need in
future
job
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jobs
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. and it will contribute to their
future
.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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