•In large cities, the issue of overpopulation has been a significant cause of concern which leads to a lack of jobs and traffic congestion. What is the cause of this? How can government help in solving this problem? 1.High burn rates

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the population has been increasing dramatically.

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in controlling any country and

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to universities and jobs gathering there.

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education opportunities.

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build many companies and schools in rural areas with the same level of education and values.

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11Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

232 words

<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: <4

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

Overpopulation
Urbanization
Migration
Resources
Urban planning
Job opportunities
Transportation infrastructure
Space utilization
Companies relocation
Remote work
Flexible working hours
Public transportation
Satellite cities

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