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The charts below show the changes in the proportion of energy produced from different resources in a country in 1985 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in the proportion of energy produced from different resources in a country in 1985 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The two pie charts illustrate the proportion of six types of
energy
 proportion in 1985 and 2003.
Overall
, the most significant
sources
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source
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 of
energy
 was oil, which accounted for over half the production of
energy
 ,
while
others
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other
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 resources generated the least amount of
energy
.
Energy
 produced by oil comprised 52% in 1985 and slowly decreased to 39% after 28 years.
Likewise
, in 1985, nuclear power generated 22% which declined moderately to eight% in 2003. With regards to the remaining methods of producing
energy
, there was an approximately
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