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The charts below show the changes in the proportion of energy produced from different resources in a country in 1985 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in the proportion of energy produced from different resources in a country in 1985 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the changes in the percentage of
energy
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 that was produced from different sources in a country in two different years ( 1985 and 2003).
Overall
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, the production of
energy
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 from oil and nuclear decreased significantly over the period given,
while
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 coal and natural gas spread more widely. In 1985, more than half of the
energy
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 was produced from oil. Nuclear had only a tiny proportion,
whereas
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 hydro
energy
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 remained the same. The pie chart shows that 52% of
energy
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 was produced from oil in 1985. In comparison, in 2003
this
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 proportion declined to 39%.
Likewise
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,
energy
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 from nuclear had the same trend and
this
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 amount dropped from 22% to 8%. In terms of natural gas, its production went up from 13% in 1985 to 23% in 2003.
Moreover
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, the proportion of
energy
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 produced by coal doubled from 8% to 22%.
Furthermore
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, the fraction of renewable
energy
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 quadrupled and increased from 1% to 4%
although
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 it was quite small.
Hydro
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Hydroenergy
energy
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 did not show any changes.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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