Many university students want to learn about different subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others feel it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for their qualification. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
For a long time now people in government or university officials with the help of students
are
trying to not only improve or change the Wrong verb form
have been
subjects
taught in universities,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
they
strive to make the studying experience more enjoyable and fulfilling. An example of Correct pronoun usage
apply
this
would be allowing pupils to attend additional classes to their liking next to their main course. Some people praised this
change and others did not. In this
essay
I will elaborate on both sides of the matter.
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Firstly
, in my opinion
having more Add a comma
,opinion
subjects
than usual becomes beneficial in search
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the search
of
a job. Many universities send out hundreds and thousands of pupils under the same qualification to apply their knowledge Change preposition
for
in
different companies. Change preposition
to
Moreover
, since so many people have the same diploma it is hard to stand out before employers. Therefore
, the additional courses could achieve better
understanding of a certain subject or even provide new knowledge, Add an article
a better
for
example
management when studying natural sciences, which can be implemented in individuals' work Add the comma(s)
,example
life
to be or encourage others to be more efficient. Replace the word
lives
Furthermore
, by having more subjects
a person can really narrow a path of choice in further
degrees. I think,
it helps students, especially Remove the comma
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, to find Change noun form
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they are most drawn to and most motivated to learn about Correct the article-noun agreement
a topic
topics
it
more. In my experience, taking up nanotechnologies when I was studying biotechnology, opened my mind to Correct pronoun usage
them
new
topic, which had the right amount of physics and chemistry that I strived for.
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a new
On the other hand
, subjects
that are already assigned have most likely a lot of homework and tests, which need to be passed, and picking up more work could be a tool on
a person’s health. As I mentioned before, I took up the subject of nanotechnology, but Change preposition
for
i
did not mention how the amount of work and studying doubled and it negatively affected my health. I had less time to relax and gave up exercising which led to anxiety, catching illnesses more easily and Change the capitalization
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overall
constant tiredness.
To sum up
, having more objects to dvealbe
into has its pluses, like a chance to stand out Correct your spelling
delve
for
the others in the application process for a certain role. Change preposition
from
Also
it helps you to seek out areas Add a comma
,Also
a persons
would want to learn about after graduation. Correct the article-noun agreement
persons
a person
However
, it has to be chosen by cation as workload could increase, which can lead to health problems, for
example
anxiety or illnesses.Add the comma(s)
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main point and provides supporting evidence.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your ideas.
task achievement
Balance your arguments more evenly.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.