Many university students want to learn about different subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others feel it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for their qualification. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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For a long time now people in government or university officials with the help of students
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trying to not only improve or change the
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but
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strive to make the studying experience more enjoyable and fulfilling. An example of
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would be allowing pupils to attend additional classes to their liking next to their main course. Some people praised
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change and others did not. In
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I will elaborate on both sides of the matter.
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having more
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than usual becomes beneficial in
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a job. Many universities send out hundreds and thousands of pupils under the same qualification to apply their knowledge
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different companies.
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, since so many people have the same diploma it is hard to stand out before employers.
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, the additional courses could achieve
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understanding of a certain subject or even provide new knowledge,
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management when studying natural sciences, which can be implemented in individuals' work
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to be or encourage others to be more efficient.
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, by having more
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a person can really narrow a path of choice in
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degrees. I think
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it helps students, especially
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, to find
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they are most drawn to and most motivated to learn about
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more. In my experience, taking up nanotechnologies when I was studying biotechnology, opened my mind to
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topic, which had the right amount of physics and chemistry that I strived for.
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,
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that are already assigned have most likely a lot of homework and tests, which need to be passed, and picking up more work could be a tool
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a person’s health. As I mentioned before, I took up the subject of nanotechnology, but
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did not mention how the amount of work and studying doubled and it negatively affected my health. I had less time to relax and gave up exercising which led to anxiety, catching illnesses more easily and
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constant tiredness.
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, having more objects to
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into has its pluses, like a chance to stand out
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the others in the application process for a certain role.
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it helps you to seek out areas
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would want to learn about after graduation.
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, it has to be chosen by cation as workload could increase, which can lead to health problems,
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anxiety or illnesses.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main point and provides supporting evidence.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your ideas.
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Balance your arguments more evenly.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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