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You were recently impressed by a staff member at a supermarket. Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter: •Describe the situation • Explain how you were helped • State what you are going to do as a result of this good experience

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Dear Sir or
manager
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Manager
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.
Initially
, Introducing myself, My name is Sarvinoz. Today, I am going to
writing
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write to
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supermarket's
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the supermarket's
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 staff, Whose name is Katrina. Two days ago, By visiting
to
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shopping, I saw her kindness,
hospitality
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and hospitality
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. To be honest, To start
of
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my home decoration, I faced some charities, What color
i
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I
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 have to choose for being beautiful my room. The staff assist me
to work
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in working
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 out of
this
 problem. She appeared
of
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to
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 me, what things
is
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are
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 suitable for me.
According to
 these, Katrina picked out bright colours as
i
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I
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want
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wanted
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.
During
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While
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 speaking with me, She smiled with sweetness for me. I am going to share my idea with you. Having like these workers
to
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in
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the
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apply
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society,
They
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will
bring to
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improve
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 the success for improving company.
In addition
, Good relationship needs
to
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in
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 every
places
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place
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. I want to
inform
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share
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my impression with you. In the future, I will pray to multiply like these people in the future
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Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 faithfully, Jumayeva Sarvinoz.
Submitted by sarvinozjumayeva813 on

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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