Some poeple say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in thie free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on thier own. ' Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
It is known that every family growing to their
chilren
different type. Some parents want their Correct your spelling
children
children
join to organised group activities others are
not. Verb problem
do
this
essay will explain both organized class activities and free time.
On the one hand, group activities are so important to children
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children's
growing
. İt Replace the word
growth
makes
Verb problem
apply
increase
their relationship, ability and realize. That's why mostCorrect subject-verb agreement
increases
the
parents Correct article usage
apply
choosing
Wrong verb form
choose
this
way. For example
, my friend's son who is 12 years old, was very shy with another citizen then
his father made a decision for his son and the boy started group game therapy. when the boy played his friend that loss shining by
day by, Wrong verb form
shone
finally
he overcame Correct word choice
and finally
to
his character.
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apply
On the other hand
,we have to let children
be free people in their free time. İt has positive
side and negative side Add an article
a positive
firstly
, they may get bored and live depressed because all children
not similar some are strong others are not. Add a verb
arechildren
werechildren
Secondly
, if they may
not Verb problem
are
be
Unnecessary verb
apply
depresed
, they will be strong people because they will learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Correct your spelling
depressed
For instance
, my lately more douth played everytime
alone and she has strong ecology. it was thanks to playing alone, not needing others' friends.
Replace the word
every time
To sum up
, the to way is so important because the bogth
is correct. In my Correct your spelling
both
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opinion
we have to the best way to Add a comma
,opinion
according to
children
. Some children
want to play with friends because they can be happy with friends while
games. They can learn a lot of things thanks to games.Submitted by ares.grup on
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