Some poeple say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in thie free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on thier own. ' Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is known that every family growing to their
chilren
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different type. Some parents want their
children
join to organised group activities others
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not.
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essay will explain both organized class activities and free time. On the one hand, group activities are so important to
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growing
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. İt
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increase
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their relationship, ability and realize. That's why most
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parents
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this
way.
For example
, my friend's son who is 12 years old, was very shy with another citizen
then
his father made a decision for his son and the boy started group game therapy. when the boy played his friend that loss
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day by,
finally
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he overcame
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his character.
On the other hand
,we have to let
children
be free people in their free time. İt has
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side and negative side
firstly
, they may get bored and live depressed because all
children
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not similar some are strong others are not.
Secondly
, if they
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not
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depresed
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, they will be strong people because they will learn how to occupy themselves on their own.
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, my lately more douth played
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alone and she has strong ecology. it was thanks to playing alone, not needing others' friends.
To sum up
, the to way is so important because the
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both
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is correct. In my
opinion
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we have to the best way to
according to
children
. Some
children
want to play with friends because they can be happy with friends
while
games. They can learn a lot of things thanks to games.
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