The pie chart below show the online shopping sales for retail sector in new Zealand in 2003 and 2013.
The given illustration depicts information about online shopping sales for the retail sector in New Zealand in 2003 and one decade later.
Overall
, the best sale in 2003 were
travel, in 2013 film/music, but the least used was 2003 books and second-year clothes.
It can be clearly seen that in the beginning travel sales were the leader, Change the verb form
was
however
, with some gradual changes it decreased to 7 per cent
. However
, film and music were in the last
stages in 2003, by dramatic changes index improved to just over 30 per cent
and became a leader in 2013.
It is obvious that clothes sales were in the middle, but with some slow changes, they decreased by 8 per cent
in 10 years.
It is interesting to note that the lowest change in percentage was the most important and useful thing book. From the beginning until the end, it uplifted by only 3 per cent
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