You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

People have different views on
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college students should learn other courses
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their own subjects,
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while
others reckon they ought to focus on a qualification. I do believe that it is more
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beneficial
to study more
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. On the one hand, there are many reasons why they want to choose one subject.
To begin
with, giving all time to studying for
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is less
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the university
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because the lesson is relatively less than others who choose other subjects.
Furthermore
, working for an apprenticeship can improve many
job
experience which is good for them to find a decent
job
in the future.
For example
, current
job
positions are looking for an employee who has operation skills which can only be obtained through taking part in
such
apprenticeship.
On the other hand
, learning other courses
in addition
to their major is important for their width of employment. Because they can learn other knowledge which is useful to combine with their main subjects.
For example
, some students who study
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finance choose
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courses
of
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computer science,
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a
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that they can use the knowledge of coding to
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build
the process of
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trading system. If they don't have
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, they
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not get
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ideal
job
in future. In conclusion, I can understand the reasons why individuals tip the balance in favour of just
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on one subject,
although
it may less stress and have time to get
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apprenticeship ,
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I would argue that they can benefit more from the diversity of knowledge.
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  • interdisciplinary connections
  • critical thinking
  • global issues
  • consumer behavior
  • versatile
  • employers
  • principles of management
  • leadership roles
  • project management
  • personal growth
  • self-discovery
  • hidden talents
  • field of expertise
  • pioneers
  • highly proficient
  • demanding fields
  • in-depth knowledge
  • specialized studies
  • professional standards
  • employer expectations
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