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The first chart below shows the number of British visitors to the US and American visitors to the UK from 2011 to 2015. The second chart shows the spent by those visitors in that period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows the number of British visitors to the US and American visitors to the UK from 2011 to 2015. The second chart shows the spent by those visitors in that period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar charts illustrate the comparison of the
quantity
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 of
British
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tourists
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 and their expenditure on travel to the US and vice versa over a period of four years, from 2011 to 2015.
Overall
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, the number of
British
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 and American visitors,
as well as
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 their payment for travel, trended to increase.
It is clear that
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 the number of
British
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 who travel and their spending were considerably higher than US
tourists
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 and their spending over the time shown. Regarding the
British
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 traveller, the total tally of people
to
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 the US stood at 3250 in 2011,
then
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 decreased slightly to 2900 in 2013. The figure for
tourists
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 witnessed steady growth between 2013 and 2015, from 2900 to 3500.
Besides
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,
British
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 visitor expenditure when going abroad rose constantly and significantly over
the
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apply
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time
shown
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before reaching its highest level of more than 6000 in 2015. In terms of American travellers, there were some variations from 2011 to 2013. It accounted for about 2700 in 2011 and slowly the following year,
then
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 decreased back to 2500 in 2013. During the period from 2013 to 2015, the volume of American travellers saw a gradual rise from 2500 to over 3200.
Similarly
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, the amount of money paid by
tourists
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, even though it fluctuated
overall
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, increased between 2011 and 2015.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words british, tourists with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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