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More and more people are move away from where their family and friends live. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, the majority of people migrate to other countries without their families or
friends
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 and t here are both advantages and disadvantages. Despite the fact that there are few disadvantages of migration, there are more advantages in it and
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 essay will discuss both the pros and cons and the following paragraphs will illustrate it. A lot of people migrate to another country for their studies and job opportunities without their families and
friends
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. As the advantages, they can meet new cultural
friends
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 and collect new experiences when staying individually. As an example, the younger generation prefers to migrate to other countries for their higher education and they must study
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 they must earn money for their studies and living costs.
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 of that, they collect new experiences for their lives and they can make decisions independently.
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, there are disadvantages of migration which are homesickness, feeling lonely and being addicted to bad habits. Some people are affected by depression like mental disorders when they face financial problems and health problems from leaving their homes and
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 of that, they might be addicted to drugs, alcohol and smartphones.
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, it will have a bad effect on society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • professional advancement
  • self-reliance
  • cultural assimilation
  • homesickness
  • interpersonal bonds
  • multiculturalism
  • emotional resilience
  • alienation
  • expatriate community
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