ou should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

ou should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The bar provides about the outlay on food and drink, restaurant and hotel, Entertaintment among various age groups of residents in the
Uk
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UK
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by 2004.
Overall
,
the
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apply
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food and drink experienced
a
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an
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upward trend,
however
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however,
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the entertainment
oppesed
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opposed
this
trend, it showed a downward figure. The restaurant and hotel moved changeable.
Food's
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Food
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and Drink's expenditure rate was about 7% and it was
nadir
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the nadir
a nadir
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for
under
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those under
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30
years
old.
Then
it rose
approximately
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by approximately
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eight percent for
between
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those between
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31 and 45
years
old.
Following
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In following
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years
, it
contiued
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continued
a
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at a
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stable figure
almost
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of almost
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three
percent
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per cent
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for 14 ages cup from 46 to 75. For
olders
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older
which
76+
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was 76+
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that was
pick
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the pick
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point. The restaurant and hotel expenditure rate
almost
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is almost
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14% for
under
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those under
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30.
Then
, it moved constant rate
about
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of about
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12% for under 31 - 45 and 46 - 60
years
old.
However
,
next
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the next
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age group was nadir for 61 and 75
years
old. Next year, it rose
almost
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by almost
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7% for elders. Entertainment
expense
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expenses
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showed
upward
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an upward
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figure for 14 each cup until 75
years
old, and that year was vertex of
61
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the 61
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- 75 age group. For 76+ , was the lowest point about 7%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • categories
  • age groups
  • residents
  • United Kingdom
  • steady increase
  • marked decrease
  • peak
  • age bracket
  • lower spending
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