ou should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar provides about the outlay on food and drink, restaurant and hotel, Entertaintment among various age groups of residents in the
Uk
by 2004.
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UK
Overall
, the
food and drink experienced Correct article usage
apply
a
upward trend, Change the article
an
however
the entertainment Add the comma(s)
however,
oppesed
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opposed
this
trend, it showed a downward figure. The restaurant and hotel moved changeable.
Food's
and Drink's expenditure rate was about 7% and it was Change noun form
Food
nadir
for Add an article
the nadir
a nadir
under
30 Correct pronoun usage
those under
years
old. Then
it rose approximately
eight percent for Change preposition
by approximately
between
31 and 45 Correct pronoun usage
those between
years
old. Following
Change preposition
In following
years
, it contiued
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continued
a
stable figure Change preposition
at a
almost
three Change preposition
of almost
percent
for 14 ages cup from 46 to 75. For Change the spelling
per cent
olders
which Correct your spelling
older
76+
that was Add a missing verb
was 76+
pick
point.
The restaurant and hotel expenditure rate Correct article usage
the pick
almost
14% for Add a missing verb
is almost
under
30. Correct pronoun usage
those under
Then
, it moved constant rate about
12% for under 31 - 45 and 46 - 60 Change preposition
of about
years
old. However
, next
age group was nadir for 61 and 75 Correct article usage
the next
years
old. Next year, it rose almost
7% for elders.
Entertainment Change preposition
by almost
expense
showed Fix the agreement mistake
expenses
upward
figure for 14 each cup until 75 Correct article usage
an upward
years
old, and that year was vertex of 61
- 75 age group. For 76+ , was the lowest point about 7%.Correct article usage
the 61
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