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The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with date opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant

The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with date opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant
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The given table represents information about six different towns with
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quantity
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the quantity
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 of visitors and where
its
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they
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 opened between 1863 and 2001 years.
Overall
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, in half of
places
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the places
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of
passengers
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were
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 quite good ,
however
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 in other the number did not exceed 150
million
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. It can be clearly seen that
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the
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megapolis London which opened in 1863 had the highest
kilometres
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 of
route
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, it is 394 with 774
million
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passengers
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.
Whereas
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,
metropolis
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the metropolis
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 Kyoto which realised in 1981 had the lowest
kilometres
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 of
route
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,
furthermore
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 the minimum
quantity
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 of humans, which was 45
million
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. It could
be notice
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 that
two
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the two
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 cities Kyoto and Los Angeles in
kilometres
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 of
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route
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the route
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 did not reach 30 in each other,
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moreover
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moreover,
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 both in sum did not exceed in numbers of
passengers
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 100
million
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.
The
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In the
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 year 1900 Paris and 1927 Tokyo
also
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 saw that both cities had
biggest
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the biggest
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quantity
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 of people in sum
its
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apply
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just over 3000
million
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 people. It is interesting to note that Washington DC which
realised
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 in 1976 year had
the
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a
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 medium
quantity
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 of
passengers
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 and
kilometres
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 of
route
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, which was 126 km and 144
million
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 humanity.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words quantity, passengers, million, kilometres, route with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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