The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1996, 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant.

The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1996, 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram
illustrate
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the proportion of vehicled uses in the UK vary from 3 different kinds during some period of time (1985, 1996 and 2005).
Overall
, private car is the most prominent
figures
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and keep
increased
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along the
periode
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period
while
the
number
of recreational
transport
share the least.
According to
the data, about 40% of UK citizen in 1965 was using private cars
while
public
transport
and
the
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others kind
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other kinds
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of
transport
were used by 25% and 20% respectively.
Furthermore
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only 15% of the citizen used recreational vehicles and after 20 years the
number
plummeted to 5%. The
private
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number of private
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cars users kept increased to 60%
at the end
of
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the periode
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periode
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period
, in
contras
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contrast
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other kind
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another kind
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of
transport
shared
similar
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a similar
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number
from the previous
periode
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period
. In 2005,
Recreatinal
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Recreational
vehincle
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vehicle
vehicles
and other
transport
almost share
similar
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a similar
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number
, which is recreational vehicle
bounce
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back higher from 5% to 8%.
More over
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Moreover
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, other
transport
just counted by 10%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, transport with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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