Some people think that it is best to save money, for example in a bank or savings scheme. Other people feel that money should be spent whenever it is available. Discuss these views and reach an opinion on this debate.

Nowadays, people have to confront fructuated economy
in
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all over the world. To secure our
life
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in the unstable future, we have to save our
money
more than
the
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past. Normally, saving
money
with the bank is the most popular
way
.
However
,
the other
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phenomenon occurs, especially,
in
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the
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young age, they tend to spread the billnotes to buy whatever they want. In my opinion, I still believe that saving
money
to prepare myself to be ready for the uncertain future properly is the better
way
, and I am going to
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you what the reasons are.
Firstly
, everyone knows that saving some part of your income for the future is the must-to-do
way
to be
stabled
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. The easiest
way
is saving in the bank
accounts
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, which
are
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is
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still the effective
way
for now. Because the banks have a security system to protect our assets in the safest place.
In
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the same time, we are going to
received
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the
interests
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for
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allowing them to withhold our
money
. By the
way
, Because of
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difficuties
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difficulties
to be
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wealthy in
this
current economic situation, some people are hopeless about trying to be
wealth
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. The result is a new
trends
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of spending
money
is
spring
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up, which is YOLO. YOLO is from "You only live once", which is a trend that
believe
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that we should spend
money
to purchase
the
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happiness as much as possible because we
are
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all stay
in
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this
earth only once. Personally, I disagree with
this
trend
due to
it is too risky
life
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, even if you may have a short-time happiness by
follow
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this
trend.
To conclude
, in my
perspectives
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, I personally believe that saving some part of our
money
with
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in
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the proper proportion is
the
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good
way
for having
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security
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of
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life
.
On the other hand
, spending
money
for some rewards of
life
properly is
also
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neccessary
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necessary
thing. By the
way
, we should not save or invest all of our assets in
the
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only one place.
Consequently
, another recommendation is learning
the
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alternative ways of investment to get more
interests
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interest
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and reduce risk,
for example
, learn to invest in
the
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stock
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stocks
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, cryptocurrency, and real estate, It
is depend
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on what are your interests and specialization.
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  • unforeseen circumstances
  • accumulate
  • stimulate demand
  • economic growth
  • quality of life
  • financial balance
  • budgeting
  • expenditures
  • personal goals
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